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Item Description Help
« on: March 19, 2011, 06:23:37 am »
Hey.

I'm searching for someone who has a lot of patience and free time to help me to update the item description. The job is pretty easy, but it needs at least average English skills(better than mine) to fix possible grammar errors.

The job is to convert old item descriptions to new ones. I'll do the synthesis items myself, but I'm asking you to do all basic items and item sets. The job will take a lot of time depending how fast you are. This is not just one night thing. But hey, I've been doing this campaign like 3 years or something.

There are two different type old description. "Old" and "very old".

Here's an example of old converting:

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Here's an example of very old converting:

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You'll need this list to do things:

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Additional notes:

- All special things goes to same place. If it's possible and there are more than one special thing try to make one special thing in one sentence and another in second sentence.

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- Try to make special things very understanding and short as possible.
- Try to make descriptions easy to read and small.


If you want to help me, download the latest version of the campaign, open it by World Editor, go to:

=> Campaign screen => Custom Data  => Items

There are two categories which should be updated: Permanent and Miscellaneous. I'm talking about the "under categories", don't care about the upper categories they are "original items" from basic Warcraft 3 game.

I'll do Power Up myself which is Synthesis Items. Make your descriptions to a notepad or just simply put the text here. Remember to frequently give me your texts because I'll check if you are doing it correctly. It would be stupid to give me everything and then you must fix.

Please ask me anything about this request. I'm sure you'll be credited gloriously!

TEST MAP
« Last Edit: March 20, 2011, 11:32:14 am by Aeroblyctos »

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Re: Item Description Help
« Reply #1 on: March 19, 2011, 07:44:15 am »
The 1st line in the Magic Orb's description is too vague.
"+X% critical damage". It increases the damage dealt by crits, right?
Anyway, here are some tooltips:
Maragath's Armor
|c00FEBA0E+4 Armor
+200 Health
+4 Strength
|nQuality: |c007EBFF1Rare.
|c00FEBA0EItem Set: 1/3.
Maragath's Amulet
|c00FEBA0E+3 Health Regen
+4 Strength
|nQuality: |c007EBFF1Rare.
|c00FEBA0EItem Set: 1/3.
Maragath's Belt
|c00FEBA0E+4 Strength
|cff6495ed25% chance to restore 20% of the Hero's max Health when he kills an enemy.
|nQuality: |c007EBFF1Rare.
|c00FEBA0EItem Set: 1/3.
Maragath's Set
|c00FEBA0E+4 Armor
+200 Health
+12 Strength
+3 Health Regen
|cff6495ed25% chance to heal the Hero by 20% of his max Health when he kills an enemy.
|nQuality: |c00FFFC01Unique.
|c00FEBA0EItem Set: 3/3.
Miraga's Staff
|c00FEBA0E+4 Intellect
|cff6495ed25% chance to restore 25% of the Hero's max Mana when he kills an enemy.
|nQuality: |c007EBFF1Rare.
|c00FEBA0EItem Set: 1/3.
Miraga's Armor
|c00FEBA0E+2 Armor
E+200 Mana
+4 Intellect
|nQuality: |c007EBFF1Rare.
|c00FEBA0EItem Set: 1/3.
Miraga's Ring
|c00FEBA0E+2 Mana Regen
+4 Intellect
|nQuality: |c007EBFF1Rare.
|c00FEBA0EItem Set: 1/3.
Miraga's Set
|c00FEBA0E+2 Armor
+2 Mana Regen
+12 Intellect
+200 Mana
|cff6495ed25% chance to restore 20% of the Hero's max Health when he kills an enemy.
|nQuality: |c00FFFC01Unique.
|c00FEBA0EItem Set: 3/3.
« Last Edit: March 20, 2011, 04:15:55 am by Chimto »
Along the shore the cloud waves break,
The twin suns sink behind the lake,
The shadows lengthen
In Carcosa.

Strange is the night where black stars rise,
And strange moons circle through the skies,
But stranger still is
Lost Carcosa.

Songs that the Hyades shall sing,
Where flap the tatters of the King,
Must die unheard in
Dim Carcosa.

Song of my soul, my voice is dead,
Die thou, unsung, as tears unshed
Shall dry and die in
Lost Carcosa.
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Re: Item Description Help
« Reply #2 on: March 19, 2011, 11:49:37 am »
Hey.

Yeah, crit dmg is Critical Damage.

You must exactly do things as I have given otherwise this won't work. We must go exactly as the formula says. You must put the right codes to there also.

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Re: Item Description Help
« Reply #3 on: March 19, 2011, 06:25:42 pm »
OK, so... Please add the codes of the colour of each stat to the OP.
« Last Edit: March 19, 2011, 06:36:04 pm by Chimto »
Along the shore the cloud waves break,
The twin suns sink behind the lake,
The shadows lengthen
In Carcosa.

Strange is the night where black stars rise,
And strange moons circle through the skies,
But stranger still is
Lost Carcosa.

Songs that the Hyades shall sing,
Where flap the tatters of the King,
Must die unheard in
Dim Carcosa.

Song of my soul, my voice is dead,
Die thou, unsung, as tears unshed
Shall dry and die in
Lost Carcosa.
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« Reply #4 on: March 20, 2011, 03:11:27 am »
Now we are moving forward, but still there are some problems.

1) You forgot "|c00FEBA0E" from the beginning.
2) You forgot "|cff6495ed" before the special thing.
3) You made things too hasty, and didn't check what quality it was. It wasn't "Rare", it was "Unique", meaning the color must be also changed.
4) Also if we go really accurate, I would put Intellect after Armor, so that "Mana Regen" and "Mana" are closer. It somehow looks to me more logical.

Your version:

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My version:


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This is very, very accurate job. Everything must be perfect. But once you get the idea, it goes really fast making these descriptions. I'm at the moment doing Synthesis Items. There things aren't so simple because they have really long descriptions and I'm remaking some and making some more.

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« Reply #5 on: March 20, 2011, 04:08:01 am »
Quote
4) Also if we go really accurate, I would put Intellect after Armor, so that "Mana Regen" and "Mana" are closer. It somehow looks to me more logical.
Then you should rearrange the order of the stats in the OP exactly as you want. That makes things easier.
« Last Edit: March 20, 2011, 04:11:45 am by Chimto »
Along the shore the cloud waves break,
The twin suns sink behind the lake,
The shadows lengthen
In Carcosa.

Strange is the night where black stars rise,
And strange moons circle through the skies,
But stranger still is
Lost Carcosa.

Songs that the Hyades shall sing,
Where flap the tatters of the King,
Must die unheard in
Dim Carcosa.

Song of my soul, my voice is dead,
Die thou, unsung, as tears unshed
Shall dry and die in
Lost Carcosa.
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Re: Item Description Help
« Reply #6 on: March 20, 2011, 06:58:33 am »
Yeah, well. I'm sometimes too "perfectionist". I edited the original post and rearranged the list.

Heh...

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No need to make Brother set, I just did it. I did it because it was needed for one Synthesis Item I remade(Life's Stone).

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« Last Edit: March 20, 2011, 07:02:25 am by Aeroblyctos »

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« Reply #7 on: March 20, 2011, 07:52:06 am »
Now, for the next part...
Power Hammer
|c00FEBA0E+1 Damage per 2 charges (rounded up, up to a maximum of 300 bonus damage)
|cff6495edGains a charge when the Hero kills an enemy.
|nQuality: |c00FFFC01Unique.
Sword of Haste
|c00FEBA0E+1% Attack Speed per 3 charges (rounded up, up to a maximum of 100% bonus attack speed)
|cff6495edGains a charge when the Hero kills an enemy.
|nQuality: |c00FFFC01Unique.
Book of Regeneration
|c00FEBA0E+1% Health Regen and Mana Regen per 6 charges (rounded up, up to a maximum of 75% health and mana regen)
|cff6495edGains a charge when the Hero kills an enemy.
|nQuality: |c00FFFC01Unique.
Icy Crystal
|c00FEBA0E+1% Spell Damage per 3 charges (rounded up, up to a maximum of 100% bonus spell damage)
|cff6495edGains a charge when the Hero kills an enemy.
|nQuality: |c00FFFC01Unique.
Is that OK?
Along the shore the cloud waves break,
The twin suns sink behind the lake,
The shadows lengthen
In Carcosa.

Strange is the night where black stars rise,
And strange moons circle through the skies,
But stranger still is
Lost Carcosa.

Songs that the Hyades shall sing,
Where flap the tatters of the King,
Must die unheard in
Dim Carcosa.

Song of my soul, my voice is dead,
Die thou, unsung, as tears unshed
Shall dry and die in
Lost Carcosa.
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« Reply #8 on: March 20, 2011, 11:26:10 am »
I can do this. I will take the Mis category (110 items). Everyday I will work at least 10 items. I wil give you a txt file for every 1 or 2 days.
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« Reply #9 on: March 20, 2011, 11:28:54 am »
I can do this. I will take the Mis category (110 items). Everyday I will work at least 10 items. I wil give you a txt file for every 1 or 2 days.

Okay. Now you guys must decide. Who will do what? How much? Etc?

To Chimto:

Good, good.

There are some problems:

- Color coding is wrong
- There's a dot after quality and item set. There shouldn't be.



I have also attached to the original post a link to map I use to test if the descriptions are fine. I occasionally test that if I'm doing correct job. I think you should do that too. I've been doing this whole day item descriptions.

EDIT: Hohoo, I just made first MYTH ITEM!

« Last Edit: March 20, 2011, 12:51:12 pm by Aeroblyctos »

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« Reply #10 on: March 20, 2011, 03:25:20 pm »
You should test this before I continue, I use a single map to test my description (fast loading time).
Here: http://www.mediafire.com/?3vbk6b523h95qa2

There are 2 points I remade your items (just description, I'm dead dull with the editor).

1. Archeon Set.
The Archeon Hood give chance to increase 30 agi but the Set only give 25 agi. So I correct the Set to 30 agi.

2. Azeurus Set
With Azeurus Relic, this Set now has 6 parts instead of 5, so the Set should be +2000 Health and 1800 Mana instead of +1000 Health and 800 Mana.

If I was wrong, correct it for me.

NOTE: REPLY ME AS SOON AS POSSIBLE OR I WILL MAKE A LOT OF WRONG ITEMS DESCRIPTION.
« Last Edit: March 20, 2011, 03:31:50 pm by Tears »
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« Reply #11 on: March 20, 2011, 05:41:12 pm »
Looks good, but:

- There are two spaces. Get rid of the spaces.
- Azureus Relic have some boring text. Remove it. There will not be any story from now on.
- In special texts, just put everything and no extra spaces. No need to separate specials with spaces. We have to remember there's a maximum amount of text in description we must not go over it. That is why we try to make descriptions small as possible.
- Good try with Animal Set special. However don't put that space again.

I fixed one description for an example:

Your:

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Should be:

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Otherwise I'm satisfied.

« Last Edit: March 20, 2011, 05:48:13 pm by Aeroblyctos »

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« Reply #12 on: March 20, 2011, 10:39:53 pm »
OK, I will fix those and then send you with next items.
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« Reply #13 on: March 20, 2011, 10:54:25 pm »
BTW, Chimto, I think you take the Pernament category or we will do the same job :)!
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« Reply #14 on: March 22, 2011, 09:09:01 am »
Tears, I would want you to post the descriptions here, so that I won't accidentally do the description of an item you already made.
Scythe of Annihilation
|cff6495ed10% chance on attack to instantly kill any enemy whose level is equal to or lower than the Hero's level.
|c00FEBA0EQuality: |c00FFFC01Unique
Anaho Relic
|c00FEBA0E+(INTx0.1) Mana Regen
|c00FEBA0E+200 Magic Damage
|c00FEBA0E+25% Experience
|c00FEBA0EQuality: |c00FFFC01Unique
The Aerial Set's description that you just made has some grammar problems in the special part. I fixed it for you:
The Hero is healed when he moves.
Every 15th attack either heals the Hero by 2000 health or deals 2000 damage.
Every attack has a 15% chance to increase all stats of the Hero by 12 for 30 seconds (can stack up to 5 times).
When the Hero is attacked, deals damage equal to INTx2 to the attacker.
Along the shore the cloud waves break,
The twin suns sink behind the lake,
The shadows lengthen
In Carcosa.

Strange is the night where black stars rise,
And strange moons circle through the skies,
But stranger still is
Lost Carcosa.

Songs that the Hyades shall sing,
Where flap the tatters of the King,
Must die unheard in
Dim Carcosa.

Song of my soul, my voice is dead,
Die thou, unsung, as tears unshed
Shall dry and die in
Lost Carcosa.
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