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Little item sentences
« on: May 25, 2011, 10:15:43 am »
Hello.

I'm gonna make a little improvement to some items to make them more interesting. I'll add a little sentence for items, the text can be like anything for example Plate Shield: "A shield commonly used by magic type fighters."

So I'm requesting you to pick up an item and make a nice little sentence for it. There is a maximum item description cap so don't write long sentences.
« Last Edit: June 04, 2011, 05:20:25 am by Aeroblyctos »

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Re: Little item sentences
« Reply #1 on: July 06, 2011, 06:52:53 pm »
so u want stories for items now? I thought u said its not necessary on the item competition?

anyway heres a suggestion: The 4th day Aero created Azeurus Set, and Aero saw that it was gooooood.

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Re: Little item sentences
« Reply #2 on: July 07, 2011, 09:12:13 am »
Well just very little ones that makes the items look more interesting. Some items look really boring.

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Re: Little item sentences
« Reply #3 on: July 21, 2011, 11:02:00 pm »
Moderate Mana Potion: A concoction made from bleach, vinegar, urine, and a pinch of brown sugar. Its aroma alone can melt steel, but fortunately for you, all it does in this game is restore 500 mana.
Big Mana Potion: It's better than a Moderate Mana Potion because it restores 800 mana, and has more friends, listens to trendier music, and gets invited to more parties. As well as more sex. Ohyes.
Minor Heal Potion: This generic potion restores 250 health points. I mean, it's really generic. The bottle is to scale.
Smal Heal Potion: When consumed, these potions instantly restore 500 of your precious Health Points. Or Hit Points, if you think they're called that. They also cause severe diarrhoea, nausea, hallucinations, and malignant tumours, but that's not relevant.
Minor Restoration Potion: This magical draught restores 2500 HP and 750 MP, and is probably made from liquefied fairies, or something. Who knows? But does it MATTER? You'll drink it anyway, even if you found it just lying around in some manky cave.
Elixir: An amazing brew made from the tears of a goddess, or something astounding like that. It restores all health and mana.
Hero Drink: The name, of course, is a euphemism.
Glass of Sludge: A thick, viscous ooze, just like mama used to make!
Wooden Round Shield: A round shield made of wood. Pretty light, but offers only some small protection. Good for poor people!
Mythril Saber: A sword forged from the highly unique-to-this-setting metal called 'mythril'. It's not an especially exciting sword. Its favourite colour is probably grey.
Gilmax: A solid, powerful axe made for rending armour.
Killer's Armor: A tough, durable suit of light armour made from the hide of some large, hardy beast. The spikes give it a rather barbaric look.
Stogo Helmet: A generic helmet, sometimes worn by young heroes out to save their worlds from evil pig men.
Death Spike: A spear made from the bones of some great dead beast, meant for slicing the bones of other great beasts.
Message to Farmer Allan/...: A message to Farmer (name). You can't read it though. Why? Because. Shut up.
« Last Edit: July 23, 2011, 08:42:52 am by Chimto »
Along the shore the cloud waves break,
The twin suns sink behind the lake,
The shadows lengthen
In Carcosa.

Strange is the night where black stars rise,
And strange moons circle through the skies,
But stranger still is
Lost Carcosa.

Songs that the Hyades shall sing,
Where flap the tatters of the King,
Must die unheard in
Dim Carcosa.

Song of my soul, my voice is dead,
Die thou, unsung, as tears unshed
Shall dry and die in
Lost Carcosa.
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Re: Little item sentences
« Reply #4 on: July 22, 2011, 07:07:21 am »
Are you getting these texts from some sort of manga or something?

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Re: Little item sentences
« Reply #5 on: July 22, 2011, 07:11:47 am »
No... But what's wrong with them?
Along the shore the cloud waves break,
The twin suns sink behind the lake,
The shadows lengthen
In Carcosa.

Strange is the night where black stars rise,
And strange moons circle through the skies,
But stranger still is
Lost Carcosa.

Songs that the Hyades shall sing,
Where flap the tatters of the King,
Must die unheard in
Dim Carcosa.

Song of my soul, my voice is dead,
Die thou, unsung, as tears unshed
Shall dry and die in
Lost Carcosa.
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Re: Little item sentences
« Reply #6 on: July 22, 2011, 09:40:25 am »
Actually i found them funny lol ^^

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Re: Little item sentences
« Reply #7 on: July 22, 2011, 09:50:23 am »
I will post only sinthies:D.
Orb of Stats-A magical orb that could provide perfection in every aspect
Zwill blade-Zwill was a beginner dragon slayer that died without the luck of his jade ring.If his ring is united with a milthril saber , the blade of Zwill shall be assembled  once more.
Ring of Rejuvenate - A young priest named Alithini , had 2 rings , one from his father , and one from his mother.After they died , the 2 rings becamed one , wich Alithini hold his entire life.
Restornation Blet-A blet of a strong moonk that lived near the Icy Mountains.
Master key-The key that can open each kind of door.Crafted by the first Thief in the Olivert.
Aerial Shoes- He, who wield the shoes , will walk with a speed beyond the limits.
Improved Fire cloak-A young ressident of Kar'Gath crafted the improved version of the fire cloak.
Demon's Stiletto-The demon that disobeyed the dragons died by the hand of himself , thus his poisonous items can still be found.
Ring of Great Rejuvenate-With the aid of the Mage Guild , the ring that Althini held becamed powerfull every day.
Orichalcon-Zwill convinced his moonk to give him the blet he wield just before Zwill died.After his death , the blet conbined with Zwill blade , becoming a stronger artefact.
Ring of Mega Rejuvenate-Alithini died killed by a strong emerald dragon , witch improved the ring.Alithini's soul has been kept in the ring , making the ring so strong that the dragon couldn't wield it.
« Last Edit: October 22, 2011, 02:20:41 pm by Blackdoom59 »

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Re: Little item sentences
« Reply #8 on: August 28, 2011, 08:25:24 pm »
You don't continue this anymore Blackdoom? I'd like to see more of your crude stories and numerous spelling mistakes! I also really liked how you made every single synthesis item, including the lowly Restoration Belt, into powerful and unique artefacts!!!
Actually i found them funny lol ^^
I made them to be humorous, because the campaign is quite lacking in terms of humour - just Fradz isn't enough.
« Last Edit: September 15, 2011, 02:03:35 am by Chimto »
Along the shore the cloud waves break,
The twin suns sink behind the lake,
The shadows lengthen
In Carcosa.

Strange is the night where black stars rise,
And strange moons circle through the skies,
But stranger still is
Lost Carcosa.

Songs that the Hyades shall sing,
Where flap the tatters of the King,
Must die unheard in
Dim Carcosa.

Song of my soul, my voice is dead,
Die thou, unsung, as tears unshed
Shall dry and die in
Lost Carcosa.
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Re: Little item sentences
« Reply #9 on: September 02, 2011, 06:02:58 am »
I liked these:

Hero Drink: The name, of course, is a euphemism.
Glass of Sludge: A thick, viscous ooze, just like mama used to make!
Wooden Round Shield: A round shield made of wood. Pretty light, but offers only some small protection.
Gilmax: A solid, powerful axe made for rending armour.
Killer's Armor: A tough, durable suit of light armour made from the hide of some large, hardy beast. The spikes give it a rather barbaric look.
Stogo Helmet: A generic helmet, sometimes worn by young heroes.
Orb of Stats: A magical orb that gives fighning skills in every aspect.
Zwill Blade: The name comes from the original blacksmith who created the sword. Nowadays the sword is quite popular for it's low price compared to it's powers.
Master key: A magical key that can be used to open almost every type of doors in around world of Oelivert.

I didn't like half of Chimto's jokes and some of Blackdoom's texts were too long. I prefer one to two sentences. I still have that maximum item cap description.

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Re: Little item sentences
« Reply #10 on: September 02, 2011, 01:00:01 pm »
I would like to comment that I didn't like the text color of comments in game please change them to the grey color you have in the example, also I would prefer you to use the old color for items that are part of synthesis items it looked better :)

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Re: Little item sentences
« Reply #11 on: September 07, 2011, 03:26:30 am »
I would like to comment that I didn't like the text color of comments in game please change them to the grey color you have in the example

The "comment text" should always be grey. If not it's a bug then.

also I would prefer you to use the old color for items that are part of synthesis items it looked better :)

I didn't quite get this suggestion.

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« Reply #12 on: October 21, 2011, 12:38:04 am »
Ice Crown: This seems to be some sort of crown. It has a small lapis lazuli that doesn't do anything at all!
Cursed Blade: A Dark-elemental sword, imbued with eldritch powers. Probably.
Doom Helmet: A semi-legendary helmet said to have been used in some great battle thousands of years ago or somesuch.
Mother Earth: A semi-legendary artefact used by some great Shaman hero aeons ago. It is said that when he died, a forest grew around his grave, and the artefact was lost deep within it. Or something to that effect.
Doom Sword: A Fire-elemental sword, tipped with a claw of the Doom Lord. Awarded for defeating that lord.
Mythril Saber: A simple metal sword with no magical enchantments whatsoever.
Golden Trophy: A trophy made of... well, you can probably work it out somehow.
Grandmaster's Mage Staff: A staff that was once used by some great sage or something.
Deadly Knife: An expensive dagger crafted from a fine metal. It has a creepy, unsettling aura to it, it feels like it might suddenly cut you when you're not looking.
Ring of Tides: A ring often used by knights. Probably because 'tide' and 'knight' rhyme. But probably not.
Golden Claw: This claw-like weapon ISN'T made of solid gold, because it'd be ludicrously expensive and rather soft and useless if it was. Instead, it's merely gold-plated.
Rogue's Hood: This piece of everyday clothing is magically enchanted to provide enhanced speed. But why?!?
Elexorien III: A rather psychadelically-fabulous-looking sword, wielded more for its power than for its looks.
Shard of Shadows: A small amethyst gem, enchanted with eldritch magicks of darkness and all that sort of stuff.
Health Gem: A gem which is attuned to the physical wavelengths and body chakras such that it increases the potential of the body of the wearer. Or something like that.
Mana Gem: A gem which is attuned to the mental wavelengths and mind chakras such that it increases the potential of the mind of the wearer. Or something like that.
Skull Shield: 'Alas, poor Yorick!' It feels rather morbid to hold one of these things.
(Yes, I know. I love humour)
« Last Edit: November 22, 2011, 05:20:08 am by Chimto »
Along the shore the cloud waves break,
The twin suns sink behind the lake,
The shadows lengthen
In Carcosa.

Strange is the night where black stars rise,
And strange moons circle through the skies,
But stranger still is
Lost Carcosa.

Songs that the Hyades shall sing,
Where flap the tatters of the King,
Must die unheard in
Dim Carcosa.

Song of my soul, my voice is dead,
Die thou, unsung, as tears unshed
Shall dry and die in
Lost Carcosa.
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Re: Little item sentences
« Reply #13 on: October 21, 2011, 11:02:48 am »
A rather blunt but quite humorous description for each item. I like it!

Isn't the Mother Earth item a quality type of Mythical or something? and so the semi-legendary description wouldn't work out right or is legendary of higher quality?(in-game)


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« Reply #14 on: October 21, 2011, 02:13:53 pm »
First son:Oh my son!My first son!I will grant you power , women , gold!
Second son:I love you too my son!I will grant you  women and gold!
Third son:I will not forget you my son , i will grant you lots of gold!
Three sons:What the hell?I didn't knew i had siamese twins...

Banana:Eat it like a monkey and you will become JUICY!
Cheese:You stink!
Bread:Look at me now God!I am eating the holy food!
Piece of meet:Today our chicken died , a sad day indeed.
Pie:Stoled from grandma.

Power hammer:Phodom's favorite hammer.When Phodom Killed his first dragon , blood lust and power raged within him!
Sword of haste:The left or the right?
Magic cristal:It's fragile!

Holy seal:Homeless people's salvation!
Holy stump:Some old ranches from some old forest in an old map drawn by  Aeroblyctos the old.
Health gem:Behind me.
Mana gem:In front of me.
Mega gem:You don't want to know where , seriously

Vulcanic fissure:A nice book.
Fire ward:Ho-ho-ho-HOT!

Aero:If you have this item , you won.
« Last Edit: October 21, 2011, 02:28:04 pm by Blackdoom59 »