FREEZE -
[current] Targeted enemy is
freezed for the following 5 seconds [...]
[suggested correction] Targeted enemy is
frozen for the following 5 seconds [...]
SUGGESTION Target enemy is frozen for 5 seconds [...]
BONE CHILLER - suggested way to fit it into warcraft 3 style writing, but made normal correction in case you don't like suggestion
[current] Freezes enemies around Galeoth
making damage over time for 3 seconds. Also disables their basic attacks and movement and
giving them Brittle for 3 seconds.
[suggested correction] Freezes enemies around Galeoth
making them take damage over time for 3 seconds. Also disables their basic attacks and movement and
gives them Brittle for 3 seconds.
SUGGESTION Galeoth freezes nearby enemies, damaging them, disabling their basic attacks and movement, and giving them Brittle for 3 seconds.
SEAL OF RESURRECTION - changed quite a bit, doesn't need this exact phrasing, but its all kinds of wrong
[current] Places a powerful seal
to a target character [...]
all his health and mana are full plus his cooldowns are reseted.
[suggested correction] Places a powerful seal
on a target character [...]
his health and mana are completely restored, and all of his cooldowns have been reset.
ICY BARRAGE -
[current] Basic attacks of Galeoth will slow opponents by 25% for 5 seconds and
has a 10% chance to stun for 1 second.
In addition increases Galeoth's attack range by 25%.
[suggested correction] Basic attacks of Galeoth will slow opponents by 25% for 5 seconds and
have a 10% chance to stun for 1 second. Galeoth's attack range
is also increased by 25%.
PIERCING SHARD -
SUGGESTION[current] [...] Piercing Shard does extra damage the further its cast away.
[suggested correction] [...] Piercing Shard's damage increases with increased range.
MAGICAL HAMMER -
[current] [...]
When hit, deals damage to it [...]
[suggested correction] [...]
When it hits, it deals damage to the target [...]
ICE ELEMENT -
SUGGESTION Ice Elemental
MESMERIZING ICE CRYSTAL -
[current] Summons a Mesmerizing Ice Crystal that forces nearby enemies
attacking itself. Enemies who
attacks the crystal will receive damage back. The crystal also increases
characters hit point
regenerations.
[suggested correction] Summons a Mesmerizing Ice Crystal that forces nearby enemies
to attack themselves. Enemies who
attack the crystal will receive damage back. The crystal also increases
characters' hit point
regeneration.
CHILL OF THE FROST MASTER -
[current] Galeoth creates a powerful icy nova around
him, [...]
[suggested correction] Galeoth creates a powerful icy nova around
himself, [...]
FROZEN FANG - ? ? ? says 'stuns them for 3 seconds and gives them Bleed both for 6 seconds' should 'both' be taken out? it makes it sound like both bleed and stun for 6 seconds but it says stun for 3 - or am I missing what it is there for?
SUGGESTION change 'to a selected area' to 'to the selected location' to match my other suggestion(s).
GLACIAL ARMOR -
[current] Creates a Glacial Armor
to a friendly unit [...]
Melee attacks to a unit [...] and slows attackers.
[suggested correction] Creates a Glacial Armor
on a friendly unit [...]
A unit [...] and slows
melee attackers.
FROZEN PARADISE -
SUGGESTION a little thing, but I think 'duration' works better than 'time' for both times 'time' is used.
FROZEN STORM -
[current] [...] After 10 seconds
has passed [...]
[suggested correction] [...] After 10 seconds
have passed [...]
NORTHREND WINDS - the details of this ability are in white, not yellow